@_UNDRSCRE_ I wrote an 14-page short story adaptation of the first fallout game. it was pretty darn fun. I've been thinking of expanding it as it was an absolute joy to write. it was a bit crummy, as I wrote it all in one go, so I will probably revise it one of these days. Maybe even make another one for fallout 2.

Here it is, please keep in mind that English isn't my first language and I never did really edit it so no hate pls!
https://docs.google.com/document/d/18EQryijBbj_0XJV_2PkTepRXU5B1pARgv9adJC0dfe8/edit?usp=sharing

(please keep in mind this was supposed to be an extended edition of the vault dweller's memoirs, so many strings of dialogue and excerpts from the memoirs were used!)

@_UNDRSCRE_ I wrote an 14-page short story adaptation of the first fallout game. it was pretty darn fun. I've been thinking of expanding it as it was an absolute joy to write. it was a bit crummy, as I wrote it all in one go, so I will probably revise it one of these days. Maybe even make another one for fallout 2.

Here it is, please keep in mind that English isn't my first language and I never did really edit it so no hate pls!
https://docs.google.com/document/d/18EQryijBbj_0XJV_2PkTepRXU5B1pARgv9adJC0dfe8/edit?usp=sharing

(please keep in mind this was supposed to be an extended edition of the vault dweller's memoirs, so many strings of dialogue and excerpts from the memoirs were used!)

the story is great but you need to "show not tell"

e.g. your saying things like i live in vault 13 with rats instead of something like the place stunk of rat poo.............................in order to protect the place from the danerous gamma rays even the fingers of light were not allowed to reach us..............This is the filth we live in, this is vault 13. (each .............means use at another location, these are just other examples) but fretty good for an english second langauge